will you rate these lyrics im new to hip hop writing so any advice will be greatly welcome thank you?

Question by i-cant-help: will you rate these lyrics im new to hip hop writing so any advice will be greatly welcome thank you?
estate is a hood in ireland
sorry about spelling mistakes ive dyxlexia and add

drug oozing child abusing in every crazy estate
they arent lazy their just no one to motivate
hazy in the morning and fulla hate
the comedowns so bad they purchase an 8th
so translate calculate and serve the facts on a plate
modern day impact on the youth could be great
be to this date their letting their pupils diallate
who to blame i thinks its the goverment
when are they gona discover its bent
half sealing cracks with rubber not cement
from the the slums themself but wearing a posh accent
we also got a useless and disasterous president
who would lay on her fat *** during a monstourous event
taking from the poor and not the rich
leading to a whore being treated like a *****
i just cant take it anymore like a bad itch

life is hard but true
young kids killing pain sniffing glue
illing their brain threw and threw
willing and insane to **** you around
anything to get their hands on a cheap pound
rob your ring while you sleep without sound
cut you for the coat on your back
roll up a note snort and go wack
and promote being a maniac
modern day many a snake in the grass
it dosnt pay a stake to be an harras
so i dont wana potray being an jackass
i try to keep it real
but im 2 deep so i dont appeal
people rather hear about a boatmobile
but i eat them b1tches like oatmeal

on the street,everyman has his price
you can try to cheat,but you cant live twice
its really sad,when a mother losses her son
makes me mad,over something as pointless as a gun
killing is bad,and second to none
i cant understand crime why cant get along
lost in the sand of time were did we go wrong
children losing their souls with pain
abusing chemical cut cocaine
leading to been f?cked in the butt to maintain
the breakdown isnt been addressed
looked down with a frown at its best
we need to come together and unite
rugged like leather and strike like a meteorite
in my opion the bark is worse than the bite
so i dont fight i leave my mark when i write

Best answer:

Answer by WE RUN CLE 216
a rapper from ireland WOW!

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