How Do you like the first chapter of my novel?
Question by Me.: How Do you like the first chapter of my novel?
Hey everyone I’m 14 and had bulimia and I know how people deal with such news, here is the first 3 chapters of my novel, which has not yet have a name.Enjoy! I want your opinions!
Chapter 1. THE NEWS
You know that phrase : “You shouldn’t care what other people think?” Yeah that one. Who ever thought of it was probably some size zero blondie who had the perfect life, who cares what people would think about her? After all everyone would have loved her.
Okay so maybe some blondie didn’t think of it. But who knows. I mean it is virtually impossible to NOT care about what others think ,I care, I bet you care, hell, I bet everyone cares. Some just care more than others.
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So there I was eating my lunch at school, alone, something which is uncommon for me, I have friends , well I DID. I sat there staring at the plate of crappy mashed potatoes, cheap gravy, and handful of green peas that haven’t completely defrosted yet. Although I wanted to eat it all, I couldn’t and this time, surprisingly,it wasn’t because I thought people were watching me , making me feel fat, This time is because people WERE watching me, I mean I don’t know who would have spilled the news: Honours student Annabelle Petes throws up her food and is addicted to ex-lax. But now that that news was out, people were watching me, waiting for me to eat, just so they could see me go to the bathroom. Well touch luck bey-otches, I thought to myself, I would’t give them the satisfaction of it, so I stood up took my tray threw it out and walked out of the cafeteria , a chorus of “BLECH” and “YAAK” follwing me.
I swear the universe hates me.
Chapter 2: LITTLE MISS PERFECT
I almost peed myself laughing as I saw Annabarf walk out of the cafetieria, that little bit.ch had it coming, now what is it that she had coming? Hmm well the fact that she stole my boyfriend, fuc.ked him in the changerooms, and her little bony a.ss sitting on my iPhone i left on the chair. I guess those bones were really stong, cause it broke my phone. B.itch.
SO naturally she had to pay, and it made mylife because she HAD NO IDEA who was doing this. FOr an honours student she didn’t seem so smart.
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I inspected my french tips carefully and butted out my 4th vcegarette as Bradley climbed into my car.
“sorry I’m late babe, coach was being a di.ckwad.” he said than contined to kiss me deeply.
I am so lucky, i thought .
“come on lets get out of here.” I said as i sped off the school campus
Chapter 3: Honours
“Do you want to talk about it hon?”I asked Annabelle, my prize student. She knew what I meant. I felt awful that she was going through this.
“You aren’t alone, look, eating disorders are commin and i AM here to help” I continued
“get out of my life okay? don’t be so nosy, just leave me alone okay> LEAVE ME ALONE!” Annabelle seemed worked up.
She stormed out of the room, leaving my breathless.
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thats it chapter 3 isnt done, its FULL of typos, what do you think?
these are just plans, they will be longer its just the jist right now.
Best answer:
Answer by Emma
Pretty good, engaging. I kinda wanna know what happens. Keep on going, you are doing good.
A few spell errors thought.
What name shall i look for when you get published?
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